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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people.

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During
this
 period,
There
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 are many different opinions on accommodation.From a question about owning a habitation better than renting ,
one
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 it is difficult to make a decision on the issue.Some people are in favour of owning a home.Others,
on the other hand
 ,believe in renting a home.In
this
 essay I will discuss both sides and why I am in favour of renting
one
. People are in favour of owning habitation because owning habitation makes them feel secure.If they get into a terrible situation with finance or unemployment, At least they have a residence for residency.
For example
,when I retire I can stay in my residence without rent,which means that
i
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 feel comfortable more than renting
one
.
On the other hand
,some people argue that renting
renting
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one
 is right because it is flexible and more convenient,
such
 as saving the maintenance cost ,
low
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 decoration cost and when I would like to change a job or location ,I can change immediately.
consequently
,the way of renting is awesome. In short,I agree that apply
renting
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one
 because
this
 way is suitable for my lifestyle. I prefer to change the environment in the future ,
however
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 it is my view that renting
one
 is a lower cost than purchasing a residence.
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