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Advances in technology have improved our lifestyle Modern appliances in the home have become more common, leaving no doubt that advances in technology have improved our lifestyle. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

Nowadays,
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 busy life leads to a
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chaotic
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 and bad habits,
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the opinion
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 of some
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 it is hard to have a healthy
lifestyle
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. Others
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 have an opposite opinion and
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 that it is easy for
people
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 to be healthy and in a good body form if they tend to it. There are several reasons why some
people
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 have
unhealthy
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lifestyle
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, and one of them is having a lot of assignments at
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, which
give
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 stress, worries and zero
time
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 to take care
about
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of eating proper food and at the meals
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, doing regular exercises and taking care about of moral healthy side as well. Another reason for unfit persons is the bad habits and bad education they got from their childhood
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, which became
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normality difficult to change
in
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years
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. The
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 two reasons I would like to mention are the
people
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 to find the excuses why they can't reach
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 better
lifestyle
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. To my mind,
people
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 should make some effort, sacrifices and invest
time
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 and money to
mentain
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maintain
 the body and the mind healthy, and the most important element in having a healthy
lifestyle
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 is a matter of choice.
This
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tipe
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type
 of
lifestyle
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requiers
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requires
 organic food, regular
exercises
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, meals,
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walks
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 in fresh arrears and
reserve
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 for
their self
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themself
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time
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 for relaxation and fun. In conclusion, it will be easy to live a healthy
lifestyle
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 if the
persons
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 understand
about
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the
amount
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 of benefits they get from it, like strong immunity,
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a healthy
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 and clear mind, good body form and no or
less
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fewer
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 visits to the doctors.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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