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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this

#countries #people #work #travel #year #school #university #studies
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Nowadays, many graduated
students
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 might consider applying for an overseas working
holiday
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 programme before their
university
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studies
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 compared
to
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a decade. Let us illustrate those pros and cons perspectives for taking up their working
holiday
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. In
this
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 20th century,
people
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 are not purely focused on the academic results, employers are
also
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 concerned about their practical experience. While candidates did have internship experience, which can ensure candidates can pick up their
work
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 quickly and understand company culture that compare with freshly graduated
students
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. In Germany, universities arrange final
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university
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students
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, who need to
work
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 a
year
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 in a company before their graduation. Most
people
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 might not have a clear career path or goal after high school. If
students
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 can find a job in a gap
year
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 before starting
university
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studies
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, which might have an opportunity to understand their strengths and weaknesses. Taking a
year
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 break for
holiday
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, which might be a great
time
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 as
people
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 are difficult to take a
year
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 of
holiday
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 when they start their career. When we get older, we need to consider our
next
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 chapter with more financial burdens.
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: buy an apartment, and have babies.
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, it might take a longer
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 to finish their
university
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studies
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 when
students
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 decide to take a
year
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 break for travel or
work
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. In a competitive job market, most
students
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 might prefer to finish their
university
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studies
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 as early as possible as they can fully participate in the job market. If
students
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 decide to take a
year
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 of travel, which means the working experience will be delayed for a
year
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.
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, after a
year
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 of travel or
work
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,
people
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 might have a chance to consider extending
university
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studies
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 after a gap
year
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. When
students
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 start their career life, which might have certain difficulty having a
work
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-life balance after
work
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. In Asian countries, over
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 culture is very popular.
People
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 might find that it might be very difficult to have free
time
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 to finish their
university
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studies
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. In conclusion, I do agree
students
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 should consider finishing their
university
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studies
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 on schedule.
students
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 should be concerned about their
studies
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 when they are young.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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