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Most people do not care enough about environmental issues. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #care
Nowadays, we cannot doubt the inflated environmental problems. The majority of people treat what is happening recently with the environment from catastrophes carelessly.
Therefore
, the environmental crises are deteriorating. I completely agree with the previous statement. As I believe that humans are supposed to take the blame for damaging Mother Nature. As humans are responsible for changing the climate immensely.
For example
, they consume gasoline enormously, so the greenhouse gases
such
 as” carbon dioxide” are increasing in the atmosphere.
Therefore
, global warming affects many creatures
besides
 human beings negatively.
In addition
, to cope with the modernization trends by building new cities and interstate bridges. The authorities impose rules to cut down many trees, since; green areas have a crucial role in purifying the air.
Consequently
, deforestation by chopping trees makes the climate barely tolerating. People’s interference has other detrimental influences on the Earth.
For instance
, Marine life and sea animals. Let me explain, overcrowding makes people produce a lot of refuse,
therefore
, the stakeholders don’t have any choice but to get rid of the waste in oceans and seas. To an extent, the news was buzzing
last
 year of the turtle suffocated by a plastic bag that was found around its nozzle.
Besides
 Marine life, the colour of seas has changed way more than before, because factories dump their chemical wastes in the water.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prioritize
  • immediate needs
  • connect with
  • distant
  • abstract
  • economic considerations
  • growing awareness
  • active participation
  • initiatives
  • movements
  • impacts
  • well-being
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