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Some people think that music plays an inportant role in seciety. Others think it is simply a form of entertainment. Discuss both views and gives your opinion

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People
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heterogeneous
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 opinions
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 the role of
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society. Some opine that it plays a crucial role in our daily
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wheras
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whereas
 others merely consider it as one form of replaceable entertainment. In
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 ideas of both sides. To die-hard
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 lovers, not only is
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 an imperative cultural activity but it is
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 ubiquitous in our daily
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. Musical performances have long been used in religious ceremonies since ancient times.
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, songs are still sung in a church nowadays, no matter it is
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weekly worship or when a king is crowned. Plenty of adolescents are very fond of pop singers and spend plenty of time listening to their latest performances.
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 to religious avenues, we can simply find
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 everywhere. Not to mention all kinds of concerts, whether they are performed by an orchestra or
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 a rock-and-roll
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, we can
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 find background
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 in films, advertisements, and even in all kinds of retail shops. To a lot of ordinary
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,
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,
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 is not that important to them. Notwithstanding the fact that
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 is useful in some ways, they are in the opinion that there
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 more than one form of entertainment available to them and
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 it is not crucial. The importance of
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 is best reflected by a hypothetical world without it.
People
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 would still be able to turn to multifarious sports events, museums, art galleries and so on. Had background
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 been banned, films would have irrefutably been more monotonous, but
movie makers
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 would find a way to impress audiences. In the case of the absence of truck drivers,
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, our
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 would have been
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a bigger mess.
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, a lot of
people
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 consider that having musicians is not something more important than other aspects
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 our
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, at least not more crucial than having truck drivers. In conclusion,
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do
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 play a role in our daily
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 but
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 will be okay without them. To me, I am in the camp that
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 is not that important to most
people
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.
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