Many people today choose to take part in extreme sports,(eg skydiving, rock climbing) Why do you think people want to do these sports? Who do you think should pay if people injure themselves while doing an extreme sport?

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Nowadays, high-risk recreations are becoming increasingly popular among

people

, and they take part in

sports

such

as rock climbing and snowboarding. There are several reasons why

people

tend to attempt these unusual activities. Since there might be some undesirable physical side effects from them,

sports

providers, I believe, should take the necessary steps to tackle the problem. There are several reasons why individuals show

tendency

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towards

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extreme

sports

To begin

with, the main reason justifying their belief is feeding of excitement.

That is

to say, they assert that by doing action

sports

they would experience a feeling of joy as well as

outleting

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outlets

outlet

for energy. Take an average university student who encounters various stressful situations

range

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from low pay for

part-time

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a part-time

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job to studying long hours for exams as an example;

this

would help them to escape from the stress and monotony of life.

In addition

, there is another reason which is by no means negligible.

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, well-known

people

endorse these entertainments which increase interest between others and motivate them to attend more.

However

, there might be some drawbacks involved in these pastimes which could be controlled by introducing some regulations.

In other words

, as these actions seem to be

life threatening

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there should be

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health insurance that covers (in-action ?) harms. To put it differently, attendees can take part while they are provided with medical insurance, and

this

move one step forward in improving safety which in turn decreases the damage posed by the danger of these

sports

. In conclusion, the main reason

people

care for extreme

sports

is to provoke a feeling of joy, and despite the possible risks, having insurance provides security.

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