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With the rise in popularity of the internet, newspapers will soon become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
last
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 few decades,
as
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 a high technology
century
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century,
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people
 tend to surf the
internet
 and get
news
 on their devices,
as a result
,
newspaper
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newspapers
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becoming
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 the thing called old school. I completely agree with
this
 statement and elaborate on
this
 essay. On the one hand, new technologies massively changed the speed of
news
 delivery. The invention of television and radio prepared humanity for the upcoming
news
 revolution. Before the 19th century, newspapers were crucial for
people
. Newspapers, letters and rumours were the only
source
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sources
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 of information back
then
. In the 20th century with the help of radio and television, it became possible to hear
news
 upon request right from home at any time of the day. To be more specific, the invention of the
internet
 was a real game changer. Soon after the
internet
, new devices with direct
internet
 connection became reachable and affordable to everyone.Today, a huge percentage of
people
 have personal mobile phones or laptops.
Thus
, starting from
this
 moment, everyone obtained a chance to create and read content from all possible places on Earth.
In addition
, it gave an opportunity to create articles and video reviews and share them through the
internet
 at any time and any place.
Furthermore
, new applications and streaming platforms prove that revolutionary change. More applications for mobile devices appear every day and streaming platforms create more interesting formats for content consumers. In conclusion, newspapers
has
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 become old school source of information.
Therefore
, new technology changed the methods of data and content delivery. These techniques have become more easy and suitable for
people
 and the
internet
 today is the main source of information.
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