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With the rise in popularity of the internet, newspapers will soon become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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last
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 few decades,
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 a high technology
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people
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 tend to surf the
internet
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 and get
news
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 on their devices,
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,
newspaper
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newspapers
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becoming
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 the thing called old school. I completely agree with
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 statement and elaborate on
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 essay. On the one hand, new technologies massively changed the speed of
news
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 delivery. The invention of television and radio prepared humanity for the upcoming
news
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 revolution. Before the 19th century, newspapers were crucial for
people
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. Newspapers, letters and rumours were the only
source
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sources
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 of information back
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. In the 20th century with the help of radio and television, it became possible to hear
news
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 upon request right from home at any time of the day. To be more specific, the invention of the
internet
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 was a real game changer. Soon after the
internet
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, new devices with direct
internet
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 connection became reachable and affordable to everyone.Today, a huge percentage of
people
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 have personal mobile phones or laptops.
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, starting from
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 moment, everyone obtained a chance to create and read content from all possible places on Earth.
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, it gave an opportunity to create articles and video reviews and share them through the
internet
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 at any time and any place.
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, new applications and streaming platforms prove that revolutionary change. More applications for mobile devices appear every day and streaming platforms create more interesting formats for content consumers. In conclusion, newspapers
has
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 become old school source of information.
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, new technology changed the methods of data and content delivery. These techniques have become more easy and suitable for
people
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 and the
internet
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 today is the main source of information.
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