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Band 6.5

Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic. Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves? Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and with relevant evidence.

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It is argued that wealthy
countries
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 should help poor
countries
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 by providing basic
food
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 and education
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 it is the responsibility of every nation's government to serve the public at the foundation levels.
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 essay agrees that poor nations need the necessities of
food
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 and education during war times.
Firstly
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, a one-time meal should be shipped for living reasons;
secondly
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, the right guidance and training should be accessed to defend the situation. The primary source of
food
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 is essential to survive humans in a situation where they find difficulty so in terms of
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 wealthy nations can support
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 facility through Air shifts or Port shifting.
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, the United States of America is a
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, which supplies
food
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 to Ukraine for all people
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 they can stay alive during wartime.
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,
this
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 humanity can be saved by the richest
countries
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.
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, it is vital information to access the proper training and guidance of any technical weapons the
country
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 needs meanwhile in
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 conditions where war is live.
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 is
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 proper knowledge of using weapons or using and launching a radar tank can be helpful to defend their
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.
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, the United States of America is the only
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, which supplied millions of guns and fighter planes to Ukraine to support their humans. In conclusion, the basic needs of poor
countries
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 should be fulfilled by the wealthy nations because of
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 no any
countries
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 can see wartime.
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, it is a fact that proper guidance in education is
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 an argumental point.

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Ensure that the response fully addresses all parts of the task. The essay should present a clear position throughout the response.
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Ideas need to be expanded with more detailed explanations and arguments should be more fully developed with a clearer progression of ideas.
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Use relevant, specific examples to support points, ensuring they are effectively integrated into the essay's argument.
coherence cohesion
Organize ideas logically, ensuring clear progression throughout the essay. Make use of paragraphing to enhance readability and structure.
coherence cohesion
Include a clear introduction and conclusion to frame the essay, presenting and summarizing the main points effectively.
coherence cohesion
Develop main points with sufficient support, expanding on ideas with explanations and examples for greater clarity.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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