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Do we have to plan for future or stay focused on our present what is your opinion and why ? provide example to support your stand.

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People's opinions differ as to whether to
plan
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 for the
future
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 or stay focused on
present
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the present
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. In my opinion, it is necessary for every individual to
plan
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 for the
future
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, the same way he should focus
at
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present
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the present
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 as well. To commence with, when a person plans ahead, he is making his
future
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 secure. To be precise, considering the uncertainty of
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future
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the future
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, every person must have plans to make the environment favourable to him/her.
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, people give much importance to insurance policies and other financial investments. Another factor which makes me think
that
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plan
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 for the
future
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 is essential because if we set a goal for
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future
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the future
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, we can stay
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 on that and work
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. To add on, Whether to construct an own house
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 or to become a multi-national businessman, well-organised plans are vital.
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, before an explorer goes on an adventure, they
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 and prepare for
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. They pack food, water, maps, ropes, medicines and other materials just in case they might need
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them
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. They might not know what danger they could face but they are prepared for it. If they go into an adventure without planning and preparing, they might get lost, hurt or worse and they will be unhappy with the results in end. So,
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a plan
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plan
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planning
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 for
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future
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the future
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 is extremely important. After analysing critically the need of planning for the
future
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, it is needed to understand that it is not easily possible without focusing on the present. To be clearer, a strong platform is necessary to make the desires for the
future
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 a reality.
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, if an individual sacrifices his present comfort and
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 a lower quality of life for a better
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, he would not get ample opportunities to fulfil his dreams.
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 may be because of problems
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 as unforeseen medical or financial emergencies. To conclude, it is clear that planning for the
future
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 is productive because it assures a safe living environment. It should be
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 noted that
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 is possible only when an individual gives adequate importance to the present.
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