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In recent years, more and more people are choosing to read e-books rather than paper books. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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With the development of electronic technology,
e-products
 have more functions. We can not only communicate with friends by them but
also
 read books.
Although
 it has both good and bad sides, I support the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. There are two shortcomings of reading
e-books
.
Firstly
, reading
e-books
 is more inefficient. If someone sends a message on
Wechat
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WeChat
 when we are reading by phone, we will probably stop reading and chat with him. Some people like playing mobile games, so they may spend more time playing rather than reading.
Secondly
, looking
the
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e-products
 for a long time is harmful to our eyes and bodies. The
e-products
 emit blue light that can cause damage to our eyes. Most of
time
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 we read by phone which has a small screen, so that we may don’t move our eyeballs,
then
 our eyes will be dry and tired.
On the other hand
, there are
also
 many benefits
for
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 reading
e-books
. I will list two aspects. Most of the
e-products
 are portable, so we can read books anywhere,
such
 as on the subway, bus or the high-speed train. When we have a travel, we can
also
 read many books without taking them. The
e-books
 are
also
 environmentally-friendly. The paper is made from trees, which can prevent the wind and keep the sand. Reading
e-books
 accords with the environmental protection thought and policy. Read more
e-books
 and save more trees. All in all,
although
 reading
e-books
 may be inefficient and harmful, we can solve these problems by controlling ourselves and having a break during the period of reading. I think the advantages are enough to push us to read
e-books
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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