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Some people say that school children should be given individual class work, while others think that working in small groups is better for them. Discuss both approaches and include your own opinion.

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Over the
last
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 decade, some schools across the globe
are started
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a
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 concept of group
assignments
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. Some parents and psychologists claim that individual class work yield better results compared to
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teamwork
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team work
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;
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, in my
opinion
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 working in small groups is more beneficial, in the following paragraphs, I will explore both views and provide
reason
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 for my stance
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 the end. On the one hand, working individually without depending on peers improves
students
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 self-confidence and individuality. To commence with self-confidence, some children who accomplish
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 on their own without relying on other
classments
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classmates
classes
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 to have higher trust
on
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 their capabilities.
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, they will gain better confidence
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 their own strengths.
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 that
such
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self activities
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leads
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lead
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 to individuality as students realise they have good knowledge and wisdom to accomplish key projects in their curriculum and personal life.
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, these days many minors without any support
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are competitive
to
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 their elder counterparts in all most all fields.
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, youth tend to apply the same for their future
endevours
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endeavours
.
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, one cannot deny that
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team work
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 provides greater social and
team
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skills
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 with,
collabrating
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collaborating
 frequently with other students provides an opportunity to learn
culture
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the culture
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 and
traditional
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 from each other due to which one can learn new social and moral
skills
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, youth who participate in group activities gain more moral and social
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 and produce better
citizen
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 which is
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crucial for
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society.
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 to social
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, frequently interacting with many
people
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 develops leadership
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 and
team
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skills
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.
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, some
people
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 who
involved
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are involved
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 in
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 sports
during
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 early age tend to develop
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greater
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team leading
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skills
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 and
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adapt
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adopt
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 to any workforce easily.
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, to
recaptiulate
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recapitulate
, some
people
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 believe that self
assignments
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 yield better grades
compare
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 to group
assignments
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. In my opinion, in
this
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society
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 human beings
haveto
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have to
 be live with diversified communities so it is vital to start collaborating
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in
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an
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 early age with different
people
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 that
makes
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 better citizens tomorrow.

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