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In some countries, some people are renting accomodation, while other are buying their own homes. Does renting accomodation have more advantages or more disadvantages than buying a place?

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in some countries some city dwellers tend to rent a house, while some other residents have more desire to housing themselves,there are some advantages as well as disadvantages.in the essay I am going to count the merits and drawbacks of these two choices and
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 make a comparison between them to show which one outweighs the other one. one of the good points of renting an abode is that people can move away from their
place
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 to another
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 without being concerned about the money deposit as they can have a short-let apartment and live there for a fewer time and easily move out,
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,many students are coming from another city just for a six-month semester and after finishing the course they can reclaim they mortgage,
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, it is not obligatory to live in the same
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 for a long time as it is their own home while the downside of a rental house is that they should pay the rent every month and that can be a burden on some families because sometimes not only the landlord may increase the price but
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 he may not renew the contract so the tenant won't have any tranquillity about their accommodation.
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 ,owning a
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 is more beneficial, the
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 reason is that you can decorate your home according to your taste and it brings diversity to household's lives and they don't get a feel of stillness in their surroundings,another explanation is that they don't have to pay any money for rent and it is a relief for them but
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 the bad point of having a home is that the maintenance costs are enourmasely high so it can be a drawback for people. in conclusion,every choice has its own benefits and downsides but on
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 occasion due to the reasons mentioned above owning an accommodation is better than renting it,whereas it depends on the location and the country.
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