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Not enough students around the world choose to study a science subject at university. what are the reasons for this? what impact does this issue have on society?

#students #world #study #science #university #impact #society
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Science
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 opens up a wide range of possibilities for
students
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' future, including employment. Currently,
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, some
students
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 do not take
science
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classes
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 in college.
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 essay will discuss why they tend not to take
science
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classes
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 and the problems caused by
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 trend. Many
students
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 do not take
science
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classes
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 because they use a lot of numbers and figures and require them to use their brains. The fact that many
students
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 are not good with numbers means that there are more of them than the government assumes.
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 to
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 result, there are many phenomena and terms that learners have to memorize, which takes them away from the subject. For college
students
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 who must work part-time and engage in a variety of studies, it is obvious that they spend a lot of time memorizing many terms. At
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 times, some challenges to society arise. In recent years, there have been a number of events that have caused enormous damage to people and the environment.
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, the fact of high temperatures
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 global warming makes the environment unpleasant not only for humans but
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 for the lives of other organisms. If the number of scientists decreases, diseases that could be prevented academically will not be prevented. New discoveries by scientists will dramatically change people's lives. In conclusion,
students
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 should take
classes
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 in scientific research and hope that more people will become scientists because of what they learn in college.
Science
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 is certainly one of the disciplines needed to solve environmental problems.
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The essay tackles both parts of the question, discussing reasons for the lack of interest in science studies and the impact on society.
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The introduction and conclusion are present and clearly defined, setting a good structure for the essay.
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Logical progression of ideas is maintained throughout with adequate support for the main points.

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