Technology has more positive than negative effects on our relationships with other people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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tech-savvy modern world, without any doubt innovation

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technology

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is one of the

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for the present globalization that connects

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accross

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the world. Some human activists and psychologists claim that

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has more benefits than drawbacks

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our relationships with other folks;

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, I completely disagree with

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statement as the evolution of machines made some citizens

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spend more time on devices than

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. To commence with, one cannot deny that

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generation is addicted to the smartphone and

internet

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, they can live without family or friends but not without gadgets. To explain

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,

earlier

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days, friends and families were spending their quality evenings

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interacting with each other, unlike now, more

people

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are addicted to their devices.

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, as per the recent survey conducted by the Child Welfare Community, India, families eating dinner together

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drastically dropped from 90% to 40% in the

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sem-decade.

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, children are addicted to video games which make them robots, they do not develop social and moral skills as they

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particpate

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participate

in outdoor

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activities

with neighbours.

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to addiction to

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, telecommuting and E-commerce are other two technologies that

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human

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touch.

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with E-commerce,

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platform provides

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greater convenience for folks to buy products from anywhere due to which these customers lose a chance to interact with shopkeepers or store owners.

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to E-

commerace

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commerce

, telecommuting is

enaled

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enabled

an option to work from anywhere which

results

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people

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do not commute to

workplace

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and collaborate with their

collegues

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colleagues

which

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to lose person-to-person conversations.

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their house for shopping or for work but now

technology

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has

elimnating

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eliminating

human interactions.

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, to recapitulate, machines are greater innovation for human beings, but in my opinion,with respect to

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they are the reason for

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of a greater bonding between the

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due to the aforementioned issues like over usage of devices, online work, and shopping.