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Some people say government should give health care the first priorities , some others believe there are more important priorities to spend the taxpayers' money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is commonly argued whether the
government
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 need to spend most part of the tax income on
health
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care
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 or not. While I believe that the
health
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care
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 system provide by the
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 is vital, I think other policies which about people’s lives are
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 important. On the one hand, because a lot of countries are faced the ageing societies in recent years, and people who start to focus on the
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care
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 system are increasing, especially if they have elderly in their families. More and more governments are willing to spend much money improving the old generation’s healthy and constructing various infrastructures which are fitted for older people. These long-term
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 policies need the
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 to cost a massive budget from taxpayers.
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, expect the
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care
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 policy, there are many topics
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 vital
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 as public transportation, education, and crime. In the education area,
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, some children cannot go to school because their parents can’t afford the fee. The
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 should assist with
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 kind of family and help these kids have the same opportunities as other children to learn new knowledge from school.
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, renewing the infrastructure like the underground system costs a fortune, too, so the
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 should plan how to use the budget and not spend most on a specific topic. In conclusion,
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 the
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care
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 topic has become popular recently, and some people want the
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 to invest massive time and money into that, we
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 need to pay attention to other life-related issues.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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