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There is a public park near where you live. You have heard that the local council wants to sell this park. Write a letter to a local newspaper. In your letter: introduce yourself describe the importance of the park say what action you will take if the council continues with its plan

#park #council #newspaper #importance #action #plan
Dear Sir/Madam, I am just writing to let you know that
a rumour news
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 has been spreading among the
park
 users about
selling
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the selling
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 of the property. Myself James Joseph living in Skyline apartment door no 32C and a working professional in a hotel named Radisson blue. The
park
 is so important because it attracts very rare species of creatures like birds, butterflies and loving parrots due to the pleasant atmosphere.
Also
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 the
park
 is known
by
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 protecting the 1000 years old palm tree which is getting to extinction and the negligence of coming new management will cause deforestation with the list of
priority
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 listed by the new buyers.
Moreover
, the
park
 gives plenty of spaces available for jogging and with attracting new people to use the
park
 daily. I would like to bring your kind attention that
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public awareness and protest will take place
,
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 if the council does not forfeit the selling plan.
Furthermore
, from the day of selling and the regaining back the
park
 to the public, people will get
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 a breakdown of all services in the area until the dropdown plan by the council. I look forward to
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 from you soon Yours faithfully, James Joseph.
Submitted by bon.joseph on

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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • affiliation
  • recreational space
  • habitat
  • environmental well-being
  • community gatherings
  • tranquility
  • negative impacts
  • petition
  • collaborating
  • voice their concerns
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