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Although more and more people read news on the Internet, newspaper will remain the most important source of news. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #news #internet #newspaper #source
Over the
last
 two or three decades,
internet
usage
 is increased due to Globalization.
News
are
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 being read on the
internet
 raised these days.
However
,
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the newspaper
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 will not be vanished to read
day to day
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 updates. I completely accept that the
newspaper
 will be there even though having
an
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internet
 and forwarded with my perception. To commence with, Nowadays, most people are preferring
internet
 especially to read
news
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 because it has more advantages. One clear example is that
,
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 these days everything is coming in online
such
 as groceries, clothes, and gadgets.
Moreover
, the
usage
 of online is being increased and releasing of applications are being increased
such
 as social media apps like Facebook, Instagram, and WhatsApp and
news
 applications like times of India, the Hindu, and Deccan.
As a result
,
public
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are
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 finding
their
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 comfort to know daily life updates
in
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online via social media, YouTube, and
reading
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by reading
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 articles
in
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on
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website
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the website
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.
Further
, even though having an
internet
,
newspapers
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usage
 would not be
ran
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 away.
Additionally
, magazines play a significant role during travelling and long journeys.
For instance
, sometimes we are being faced with network problems like signal issues and network charges at that time reading
newspaper
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newspapers
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 is very comfortable
especially
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 while journeys.
Moreover
, we can get
newspaper
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a newspaper
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five
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for five
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 or ten rupees so it would reduce our budget.
Finally
, more public
intend
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 to read life updates in magazines
although
 having an
internet
 because we can read everything in
newspaper
 like local
news
also
. In conclusion, yet having
a
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social media and websites, more people are being fascinated to read
news
 in the
newspaper
 especially tourism is mostly depends on newspapers. I believe that
,
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the
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society is having online yet
newspaper
usage
 would not
be ran
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way
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.
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