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Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security, while some people think that they cannot always expect job satisfaction, a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, Finding
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 security is hard, but finding
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satisfaction
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 is harder. Some people think that
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satisfaction
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 is more significant than
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 security, while some people think that they cannot always expect
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satisfaction
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, a full-time
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 is more crucial. In the following paragraph, I will discuss both views and explain my opinion. On the one hand, Permanent
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 have benefits.
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, Permanent
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 have a stable income base more than
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satisfaction
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.
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, Civil servant is the occupation that gains salary accurately from periods of
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 time. Every year, Civil servants will
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 a precisely salaries and positions.
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, Some civil servant has not tried hard to improve their potential in Part-time
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.
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, Full-time
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 make you feel accustomed to the workplace and ways to transport from home to the office.
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, Full-time
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 can manage a time schedule every day easily.
On the other hand
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,
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 with
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also
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 have benefits but in a different format from the Permanent
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,
Satisfaction
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jobs
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 are flexible.
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, It depends on your responsibility to search for customers,
request
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 more
work
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 on the internet or broadcast your own shops.
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,
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satisfaction
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 has various types of
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 more than the Permanent
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. The place of
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 depends on your
satisfaction
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 an entrepreneur should decide on the best location to invest.
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, by Opening a cafe and restaurant, Entrepreneurs must search the best location. In conclusion, the Favorite type of
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 depends on my personal opinion, Every
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 has both benefits and drawbacks. In my opinion, I prefer the Permanent
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, especially in high positions in international organizations or political organizations, because I think its stable in position and salary whereas my holidays are less than freely
jobs
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.
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