Government should spend money on railway rather than roads. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement

Nowadays, authorities are upgrading and building new infrastructures to keep up with the need
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transportation. Some people hold the strong opinion that government should utilize their resources on railways
instead
of roads while others may have different opinions. I
am completely agree
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with the idea and would like to discuss some important
point
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for me to do so in
this
essay. The most compelling reason for me to have
this
idea is to be
environmental
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reason. Trucks and Lorries produce thousands of carbon dioxide that are harmful to the environment while trains can perform the same jobs with better efficiency and so on. Nowadays, even trains have better fuel efficiency and governments should invest in railroad interlinking between cities. Another strong reason for my point of view is that trains perform dual tasks
such
as carrying livestock and passengers
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the same route. By investing
on
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rail roads
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railroads
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, they may even have better comfortability for passengers and carry more livestock than a lorry could ever do at the same time.
Last
but not least, when people have more
transport
options in and out of the cities, they may even ditch their cars and use the public form of
transport
. It will be
cost-efficient
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option
consider
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finding
parking
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place ,toll
road
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and rising fuel costs. In conclusion, I am agreed with the fact that governing bodies should spend their budget on
railway
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because it is environmentally friendly,
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efficient mode of
transport
and
cost effective
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mode for passengers. All things considered, I would like to suggest that government should start launching campaigns
education
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public
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and
business
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businesses
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to consider railways as
important
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an important
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form of public
transport
.
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