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Education and health care should be funded by the government and free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Education
 and
health
care
 seem to be one of the most important parts for the resident. Some
people
 believe that the government should provide free
education
 and
health
care
 to everyone. In my opinion, I agree with
this
 statement because
education
 and
health
care
 for everyone is beneficial to economic development.
To begin
 with, it is no doubt that higher
education
 can help to
country
's economic development. Residents who have higher
education
 that can increase their opportunity to study oversea in some developed countries and work in international companies.
Therefore
, they can share their experience
such
 as knowledge and technology to their
country
 and contribute to the
country
's development which can increase the GPD and improve
people
 the lifestyle.
Secondly
, in contemporary ,society most
of
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the
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people
 prefer a small family and they only have one to two children. As the result ,when the parent
get
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 old ,the young generation may suffer huge stress
of
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 their parent's
health
 problems. They may need to take
care
 of their parents 24 hours and they can not work.
However
, if the government provide
health
care
 support, they can find some professional
people
 to assist. It
is only benefits
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to
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the elder
people
 but
also
 can release the manpower
of
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young . At the same, it increases the occupation of nurses and doctors.
Thus
, it can help to prosper the economy. In conclusion, higher
education
 for residents can help to develop a
country
 and
health
care
to
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 everyone can release the manpower of the young and contribute to the society. I hope in the future government will increase the fund for
education
 and
health
care
 aspect.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental right
  • socioeconomic status
  • equal opportunities
  • financial burden
  • economically disadvantaged
  • public health expenditures
  • workforce
  • economic growth
  • waiting times
  • government budgets
  • financial constraints
  • higher taxes
  • reallocation
  • privatization
  • quality services
  • inequality
  • fulfill responsibility
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