Both governments and individuals are spending vast amount of money on protecting animals and their habitat. This money could be better spent dealing with fundamental issues in society such as poverty and health care. To what extent do you agree?
Many environmental activists combat the extinction of endangered species and their
habitat
. To achieve Fix the agreement mistake
habitats
this
some governments and citizens donates
Correct subject-verb agreement
donate
large
amount of their income for environmental conservation, Change the article
a large
on the contrary
, some people
argue that funds has
to be shifted to provide basic necessities Change the verb form
have
such
as poverty
and health
care. In my opinion, I agree that poverty
and health
issues are major concerns in current society compared to other issues.
To commence with, one cannot deny that many rural places across the globe do not have access to basic heath
care systems. Due to Correct your spelling
health
which
many Correct pronoun usage
this
people
take their last
breath in transportion
when commuting to hospital. To illustrate, Correct your spelling
transportation
as per
a recent survey conducted by the World Change preposition
apply
Health
Organisation states that atleast
one patient dies every hour on transit to Correct your spelling
at least
hospital
due to Add an article
the hospital
a hospital
lack
of multi-speciality hospitals. To help, Correct article usage
a lack
Poliymakers
and communities could work together to develop proper Correct your spelling
Policymakers
infrastucture
by building hospitals, constructing roads to medical camps, and emergency ambulances. Correct your spelling
infrastructure
As a result
, that saves a lot of lives every day.
In addition
to medical services, other
major concern is Correct quantifier usage
another
poverty
in many countries. Due to poverty
Add a comma
,poverty
people
commit crimes as they need to feed thier
Correct your spelling
their
familes
and live Correct your spelling
families
basic
life. To explain Add an article
a basic
further
, Due to increased
cost of leaving Correct article usage
the increased
low wage
workers income is not sufficient for their daily needs due to which they tend to commit crimes to support their dependents. Add a hyphen
low-wage
In addition
to crimes, many asian
countries do not offer free education that impacts poor folks as it is not in Change the capitalization
Asian
a
Change the article
an
afforadable
budget range. Correct your spelling
affordable
For example
, school studies in Srilanka is
very expensive due to which Change the verb form
are
poverty
people
not
go to school that increase Change the verb form
do not
did not
illetarates
in Correct your spelling
illiterates
illustrates
country
.
Add an article
the country
Finally
, to recapitulate, undoubtedly, the extinction of species is a global issue. I suggest authorities and people
to
contribute money to major issues like Remove the particle
apply
poverty
and health
due to the aforementioned reasons.Submitted by rana
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