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Limited money should be spent on computer equipment or good teachers. Discuss both views and state your opinion

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Education is one of the Building blocks for any Nation. It is necessary to have a timely update in terms of facilities like computers and good specialized teachers. It is certainly debatable that with limited funds where to invest, here, I will be discussing the views and sharing my opinion on the subject.
Firstly
, Technological advancement is the prime requirement nowadays in schools where smart classes and computer-based learning have taken place to gain intelligence.
Moreover
, Computer-based learning provides vast expertise materials and easy searches due to which students are getting the required info in lesser time. Taking an example of Cricket, earlier
this
 game was about book-based records and numbers only. But, with the Introduction of AI-Artificial Intelligence-based , the application you can check for playing patterns of a player, sometimes it acts on the entire team as well.
Additionally
,
this
 will help in predicting the game and scoring wins.
Secondly
, a good teacher is an ocean of expertise, there are multiple things that a computer cannot teach. Certainly, a teacher is not like a computer who can give information about everything, but he\she knows when or where it is required to use expertise. Coming back to the example of cricket again, every team has a coach who may not know the patterns like AI or does not have the world awareness, but he knows when to boost the morale of a player, and what quick changes can change the game. Concluding the above, I believe that good teachers are vital requirements always, as to server education they provide the human touch which is most important within a limited amount.
Also
, if the money is spent in equilibrium on both resources
then
 the results would be stupendous.
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