In some cultures elderly people are highly valued, while in some cultures youth are more valued . Discuss both views
Nowadays,
people
more
consider Add a missing verb
are more
about
values than the before. Change preposition
apply
World
changes every Add an article
The world
second
so do human's
society and Change noun form
human
cultures
. In some Fix the agreement mistake
countries
country
elderly Add a comma
,country
people
are respected more than youths
, but in some cultures
Add a comma
,cultures
youths
are more recognised and valued. This
essay will be discribe
both sides.
In ancient times Correct your spelling
described
describe
people
lived in clans. They chose their leaders who were the oldest or the strongest. Because elderly people
spend more time in the world
and have more life exprience
. They taught life lessons Correct your spelling
experience
for
younger Change preposition
to
people
. For example
, in my country
elderly Add a comma
,country
people
are highly valued. Because they are wise and our ancestors always respected the elders
. However
, this
view has a few drawbacks such
as most of
Change preposition
apply
people
are conservative and do not like changes. It really Add an article
the people
bother
the technology development and maybe we can sink into superstitions. The reason for that so many Change the verb form
bothers
elders
believe
in superstitions and religion.
Change the verb form
believes
On the other hand
, in some cultures
youth are more valued. In 21st
century younger Change the article
the 21st
people
can speak their mind
freely. It leads to Fix the agreement mistake
minds
modern
Correct article usage
the modern
world
and development. Because usually youths
find new ideas and guide the world
for changes. For instance
, hundred years ago younger people
must listen
their Add the preposition
tolisten
elders
and cannot disobey their rules. If elder people
made wrong decisions and youths
knew that but must not say that. This
leads to Correct your spelling
conservative
conservatite
Correct article usage
a conservatite
world
. Although
, these have disavdantages
too. Youth Correct your spelling
disadvantages
people
can be restless and chaotic. They do not have lot
of Correct article usage
a lot
expriences
as Correct your spelling
experiences
experience
elders
. It can be harmful for
Change the preposition
to
cultures
, society and their self development
.
In conclusion, Add a hyphen
self-development
Correct your spelling
everything
every thing
has two sides, we should see things differently. Correct your spelling
everything
However
, I believe we should value the youths
. It could be hectic but it can help the world
and improve the
society.Correct article usage
apply
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