In some cultures elderly people are highly valued, while in some cultures youth are more valued . Discuss both views

Nowadays,
people
more
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consider
about
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values than the before.
World
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changes every
second
so do
human's
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society and
cultures
. In some
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countries
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country
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elderly
people
are respected more than
youths
, but in some
cultures
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youths
are more recognised and valued.
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discribe
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described
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both sides. In ancient times
people
lived in clans. They chose their leaders who were the oldest or the strongest. Because elderly
people
spend more time in the
world
and have more life
exprience
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experience
. They taught life lessons
for
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younger
people
.
For example
, in my
country
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elderly
people
are highly valued. Because they are wise and our ancestors always respected the
elders
.
However
,
this
view has a few drawbacks
such
as most
of
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people
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are conservative and do not like changes. It really
bother
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the technology development and maybe we can sink into superstitions. The reason for that so many
elders
believe
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in superstitions and religion.
On the other hand
, in some
cultures
youth are more valued. In
21st
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century younger
people
can speak their
mind
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minds
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freely. It leads to
modern
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world
and development. Because usually
youths
find new ideas and guide the
world
for changes.
For instance
, hundred years ago younger
people
must
listen
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their
elders
and cannot disobey their rules. If elder
people
made wrong decisions and
youths
knew that but must not say that.
This
leads to
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conservative
conservatite
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world
.
Although
, these have
disavdantages
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disadvantages
too. Youth
people
can be restless and chaotic. They do not have
lot
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a lot
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of
expriences
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experiences
experience
as
elders
. It can be harmful
for
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cultures
, society and their
self development
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. In conclusion,
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every thing
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has two sides, we should see things differently.
However
, I believe we should value the
youths
. It could be hectic but it can help the
world
and improve
the
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society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reverence
  • wisdom
  • life experience
  • integrate
  • respected
  • innovation
  • progress
  • energy
  • investment
  • harness
  • potential
  • advancement
  • tradition
  • guidance
  • navigated
  • merits
  • tradition
  • adaptability
  • forward-thinking
  • contributions
  • intergenerational
  • respect
  • synergistic
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