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People spend too much time on the internet. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #time #internet
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When I was a child we did not have
internet
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 or even a computer, but nowadays it is a common thing to have at home and family tend to spend their day online most of the days. We
use
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 to go outside to play with other kids, and as for adults they
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 to communicate in person a lot more often than today.
Internet
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 is used too much these days to my consideration and we do not have
time
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 for regular things as we
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 to do before. There are a lot of people still spending
time
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 in nature doing sports and hiking, but most of them it is still supported by things they need to do online. On the other ,side
internet
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 gives so many opportunities to one another
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 as working online, shopping, and studying online. I am an online student too, I take a course in UX/UI design and it has been a great deal to do it online, because of the shortage of
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. I do not have to go anywhere and I safe
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 to spend with my child and husband. We work online, we watch movies online, and we play games there too. A lot of people with disabilities get to have a good job distantly because they can
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 the
internet
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. I would say that people do spend too much
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 online, but there is a huge profit from it. A person should take into consideration having a balance in spending
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 offline as well and
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 it will be a good life balance even with using
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a computer
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 and the
internet
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 on a day-to-day basis.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • excessive
  • negatively affects
  • physical and mental health
  • decreased productivity
  • hinders personal growth
  • internet addiction
  • essential
  • numerous benefits
  • productive
  • educational
  • wisely
  • individual choice
  • responsibility
  • manage
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