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Band 6.5

You are just back from a long journey and you met an airline hostess who was rude to you on the plane. Write a letter to the manager and in the letter, you should mention: • Why did you write this letter? • What did this hostess do to you? • What is your expectation?

Dear Madam or Sir I am writing to you about my
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 flight journey with your company my ticket number is 104311249 My name is Fatih Emir Yalçındağ and I flew to London from Gaziantep
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 Sunday with your airlanes.
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 ı please so much your company provided service because my previous trips were very comfortable and fun. But my
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 journey was awful and boring the reason for
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 is your company’s hostess. I got on the plane and ı sit down in my seat
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 hostess Arda Küçük came near and ı asked some questions to him. But he was so rude and disrespectful. He got angry and he shouted at me about my questions. I didn’t like his behaviour. I think he has some problems. I regret using your airline. I think you need to find a solution to
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 issue and maybe you can talk to him about
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 situation. If you do not solve
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 problem ı will not use your airlanes for my next journey I waiting for your positive response Kind regards

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Make sure to use correct punctuation and grammar. For example, 'airlines' instead of 'airlanes'.
coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your ideas more clearly. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea.
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Use a more formal tone in your letter, especially in the greeting and closing.
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Provide specific examples of what you expect as a solution.
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You included your ticket number and clear details about your flight.
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You expressed your feelings and expectations well.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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