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Do you agree that obesity is increasing in some rich countries?

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Nowadays, many people are focusing on their health.
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, particularly, the young generation with lots of money in their pockets and banks, are highly exposed to the routine of eating too much and moving too slow. But
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 is not the case in only wealthy parts of the world.
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 essay will discuss how
obesity
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 is increasing in all parts of the world. Mainly there are two main factors behind overeating.
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 of all, easy access to junk foods. It means, that today people can buy whatever they want without struggling too much.
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, an average family have a high disposable income compared to the past. So, their spending habits are
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 changed. As per the survey conducted by Harvard University in the year 2020, on average, a person spends USD 100 per month on outside food, whereas,
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 figure was USD 35 in the 1990s.
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 shows that humans are getting exposed to food
obesity
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. Apart from that, many private companies are producing cold drinks, concentrated drinks and cigarettes. Which are high in sugar & calories and
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 they are harmful. These manufacturers do very aggressive marketing of their products. Due to
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 reason, a large number of the world population is addicted to social media and advertisements, they get attracted to these products very easily. When they consume these products on a continuous basis, they get exposed to food
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. In conclusion, I do not agree that
obesity
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 is increasing only in some countries. As far as I am concerned, all countries are concerned about it. Unless the regulatory measures are taken by the regulations,
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 will keep escalating in the coming days.
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