Courses in music and art should be compulsory for student in high school. Do you agree or disagree with the idea.

Importance
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The importance
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of art and music
to be
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mandatory in high school
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was always debatable and now
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is more controversial
moreover
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, some people are accepting
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but few people are rejecting
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notion. In my point of view, extracurricular activities
such
as music, dance and art stimulate the brain and
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the
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academic performance and why I
accepting
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accept
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this
notion and explained
in
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it
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further
. In fact, crafts and
compose
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composition
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are gifted
activites
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activities
to children
those
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that
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are not suitable
to
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for
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all. One clear example is that, if a person is having the extracurricular activities
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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