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Some people think that the best way to increase road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars and riding motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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safety
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 is very important in
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 fast-paced world. While many
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 believe that an
increase
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 in the minimum legal
age
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 is not the best
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 to
increase
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safety
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 on
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, I personally believe that it is for two main reasons.
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, I think that an
increase
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 in the minimum legal
age
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 for driving is the best
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 in improving
road
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safety
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.
Although
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 there are
people
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 who say that increasing
safety
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 signs on
roads
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 is the better
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 to
increase
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road
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safety
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, I feel that if children below the
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 of 21 years are allowed to drive cars on
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 it will surely
increase
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 the risk of accidents as they might not be able to identify the signs on
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 if they are not aware of what they depict.
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, if the legal
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 is increased
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 adults and children will have a better sense of driving as compared to the younger generation.
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, due to an
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 in the legal driving
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, children will be able to drive only after improving their cognitive abilities and once they become smarter. Only when
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 happens will they be able to drive smartly using their cognitive skills. The other reason to improve
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safety
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 is the
increase
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 in penalties for speedy driving. Not only will an
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 in the fine for speedy driving reduce the speed of cars but
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 reduce the number of accidents on
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.
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,
people
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 will take care to observe the speed limit while driving so that they do not cross the limit.
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,
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 will surely reduce the number of casualties due to speeding above the speed limit. Take the national highways,
for example
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, which usually have speed limits of more than 100 mph, and should always impose fines for breaking rules
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 as speeding and avoiding stop signs, which will make
people
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 aware of the surroundings and focus on
safety
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 rules. In conclusion, not only is the
increase
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 in minimum legal
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 the best
way
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 to
increase
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road
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safety
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 but
also
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 an
increase
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 in penalties will improve the
safety
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 of
people
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. I,
therefore
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, believe that the
increase
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 in the minimum legal
age
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 is the best
way
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 to
increase
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safety
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 on
roads
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • minimum legal age
  • increase road safety
  • maturity
  • rash decision-making
  • cognitive functions
  • risky behavior
  • traffic congestion
  • urban areas
  • core issues
  • proper training
  • adherence to traffic rules
  • road conditions
  • vehicle maintenance
  • stricter driving tests
  • enhancing road safety
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