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In many countries, fast food is becoming cheaper and more widely available. Do the disadvantages of this outweigh the advantages?

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Many
people
 nowadays, both adults and children, enjoy fast
food
.
People
 think that eating fast
food
 for their daily meals is normal.
This
 essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of
this
. It is true that fast
food
 is very delicious, cheaper, saves time, and is popular around the world.
For example
, the KFC system has more than 140 restaurants, present in 32 provinces and cities in Vietnam. Everywhere, every store has fast
food
 services for
people
 with cheap prices and good taste, even if you don’t need to process. If you buy everything one by one to make a pizza, it is very time-consuming and may not taste good. So it will be faster if you buy it at the stores that have it available outside. You can
also
 eat fast
food
 when you are studying, doing housework, etc.
On the other hand
,
people
 are
also
 affected by the drawbacks of fast
food
.
Firstly
, fast
food
 does not have enough
fiber
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 and it is not good for digestion, making
food
 difficult to digest.
Secondly
, it is a major cause of diseases that greatly affect the body. Trans and saturated fats increase triglyceride and LDL cholesterol in the blood, causing heart disease.
Besides
, blood sugar spikes due to the processed nature of fast
food
 cause diabetes. According to statistics over the past 50 years, the number of Latin Americans who are obese has always been about 47%. In conclusion, while it is undeniable that fast
food
 is very convenient, it might cause diseases that adversely affect the human body. So we should eat reasonably and balance substances to keep the body healthy.
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