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People spend too much time on the internet. Do you agree or disagree?

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The
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 is known as a connector for the whole world. These days people spend a lot of their time on the
internet
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 as compared to old times. I completely agree with
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, The
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 of the
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 has increased a lot in the life of professionals as well as children due to the modern trend of rising virtual classes for youngsters and
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 opportunities for the working generation.
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, the recent covid outbreak has given a pace to all these activities. Various schools,colleges and MNC companies have been shifted over to virtual mode.
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one of the largest chains of schools and universities in the world has made online classes compulsory for all their students
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 of physical mode class.
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, The rise of various entertainment opportunities available on the
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comprises everything like
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 movies, games and social media platforms.It has been found in a recent survey by New York Times that a person on
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average spends around 4 hours a day on various platforms like Netflix, Amazon Prime and Disney Hotstar etcetera.
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 rises to 12 hours on weekends. In my opinion, after referring to both the paragraphs, the shift to the pacing
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 of the
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 is evident. As the excess of everything is bad,
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 the rising
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 of the
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 has various bad effects on the health. In conclusion, In
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 world, one should try to strike a balance in its
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 in order to procure all its benefits and minimise the harmful health effects.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • excessive
  • negatively affects
  • physical and mental health
  • decreased productivity
  • hinders personal growth
  • internet addiction
  • essential
  • numerous benefits
  • productive
  • educational
  • wisely
  • individual choice
  • responsibility
  • manage
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