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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A few people in the
community
 believe that youngsters should do some kinds of charity in their leisure
time
;
therefore
, both these precious minds and
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 will favour
from
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this
 habit. I fully agree with
this
 argument and the details will be discussed in the essay below.
First
 of all, a person should realize the importance of being a part of the society;
besides
, he should understand and always remember that populations should only
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 with
the
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 sense
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of humor
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 by knowing the meaning of living in the same neighbourhood.
This
 habit will penetrate into the personality and become a spontaneous behaviour of the person if it is learned in the early stages of life as
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 routine lifestyle. Families or teachers can support the youngsters to attend to some activities related
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 the benefits of the
community
such
 as helping the old people’s groceries. Meanwhile, a teenager can take
apart
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part
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to
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in
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 any
kinds
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 of environmental cleaning activities in his free
time
 either for having a good
time
 with his friends or to make his vicinity cleaner, which are helping his
community
 to become a better place. Recent research from Oklahoma State University Social Psychology Department has concluded that a teenager’s mental health would become better if he/she attended
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a couple of organizations related to the public without taking any money from that. In conclusion, young people should help
to
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their
community
 in their spare
time
 so that not only their mental health and the
community
’s well will become better as well which I
also
 fully agree with.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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