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the use of media is replacing face to face interaction among many people in society. Do you yhink the advantages outweight the disadvantages?

#media #face #interaction #people #society #yhink #outweight
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face to
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face
 has been reduced since
a
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 digital age arrived.
This
 phenomenon
construct
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 the higher
adventage
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advantage
way
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, compared with a disadvantage one.
In
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 present, lots of
innovation
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innovations
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 was innovated, in
media
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the media
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 and entertainment industry. New
genra
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genre
genera
 and style of
medias
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media
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was
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 founded to serve
appricable
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applicable
appreciable
 consumers.
Therefore
, the reduction of
face
-meeting has come, converse with
media
consumptions
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consumption
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. The
beneficial
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 of having various types of
media
is
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are
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 entertainment, employment, creativity and
new
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way
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live
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 constructed.
Firstly
, it can be used
in
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for
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entertaining
entertaing
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entertaining
 purposes.
This
 section can create
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mental happiness and
a
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reduce depression.
Besides
, by putting more
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brainstorming
brainstroming
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brainstorming
 and creativities, the owner can make a specific
media
to
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 specific people, which acquired more
employments
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employment
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. The borderless society will be
ocupied
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occupied
 based on the like of
media
's
genra
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genre
agenda
. 
Although
, a facing
interaction
 was reduced,
but
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the
likely
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 style people will be meet
in
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on
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 social
media
,
For instance
,
Redit
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Reddit
 or Facebook. The new
interaction
, the digital one like chats, video calls and shares, will be created.
Finally
,
new
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way
 of
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life
life's
lifes
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life
 are
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occurred
occured
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occurred
 at the end, the location where every people can be fitted. In conclusion,
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even though
eventhough
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even though
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real-life
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real life
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interaction
 will affect some industries,
but
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the
adventage
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advantage
 of
media
 can whip them out. We will have various societies, employments, and the increment of economic
instead
 of
face to
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face-to-face
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face
interaction
.
However
,
this
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difference
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different
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way
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ways
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. There are not have the correct answers, but the best will
be depends
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 on
specific
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point
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 of
views
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.
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