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In many cities an increaing number of people do not knowtheir neighbours and there is a lack of sense of community. What are the causes of this problem? How can it be solved?

More and more
people
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 become unfamiliar with the
people
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 living in the vicinity of their houses, and they tend to lose the meaning of neighbouring while living in the same neighbourhood. The main reason for these habits
are
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 related to the overcrowded in the cities and the long working
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.
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 to that, apartment
life
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 served
to
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the
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mankind as the modern era of
life
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 can be accepted as another collateral reason for
this
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 issue. The possible answers to these arguments will be discussed in
this
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 essay according to the author’s view
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this
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 point.
1900s
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 were one of the hardest times
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the
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humanity and
people
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 tried their best to survive
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 these years. Due to the challenging way of
life
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, they became more helpful and connected to each other in most of their daily
activities
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,
in
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these days.
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, these days
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 already passed and more and more
people
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 want to live in metropolitans and
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 to the urban, far from their family. The overcrowded in the megacities pumps the antisocial personality disorder and
people
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 are forgetting that they are
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part of the community, nowadays.
People
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 living in the
scyscrapers
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skyscrapers
 can only see their neighbours during the time they are in the elevators moving to the garage or returning to their home so that social relations with the neighbours become shallower, day-by-day.
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,
people
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 living in small towns know each other and have better social relations with strict connections compared to a metropolitan man. Another problem for the
people
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 living in large cities
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 the long and hard working
hours
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 sucking the
power
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 in their veins. A recent survey from New York State Social Relations has concluded that 75% of the New Yorkers don’t want to make any connections
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 the
people
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 living in their neighbourhood after these long and tiring working
hours
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, because they believe that they have no spare time to waste with someone they don’t know enough. In my view, these aforementioned issues can be solved either by some types of governmental support or the
power
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 of the
media
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. Local authorities can organise some group
activities
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such
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 as summer concerts or several sportive
activities
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;
moreover
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, the
media
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 can support
communual
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communal
activities
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 using the
power
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 of subliminal impressions
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 in the soap operas, movies or
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the commercials. In the end,
people
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 will take what they saw. The results of
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recent research supplying these suggestions
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 concluded that governments and
media
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 have a very important role
improving
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 the
populations
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 connections to each other. In conclusion, loss in the understanding of the meaning of neighbouring is a major issue
of
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 today’s world, generally related to the apartment
life
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 in the crowded cities and long business
hours
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. I think that
this
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 issue can be solved easily either with the social
activities
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 supported by the governments or the
power
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 of
media
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 as a means of subliminal advertising.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Rapid urbanization
  • Densely populated
  • Personal connections
  • Digital communication
  • Face-to-face conversations
  • Fast-paced lifestyle
  • Community engagement
  • Transient nature
  • Urban designs
  • Community gardens
  • Recreational facilities
  • Community events
  • Neighborhood associations
  • Social gatherings
  • Local networking
  • Civic activities
  • Sense of community
  • Fostering
  • Mutual understanding
  • Sense of belonging
  • Sense of responsibility
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