Schools should stop using books for teaching and instead use films, TV, and computers. Do you agree or disagree?

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that
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environmentally friendly but
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of learning for
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student
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subjects in digital format is preserving and protecting
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as one critical issue which
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greenhouse gases. Indeed, with the growth of
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industry whose
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materials are supplied from forest trees, so did its carbon footprint.
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media and new methods paper consumption will reduce significantly.
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decrease in paper utilization.
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technology for
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of training juveniles
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seem quite boring, is that using means of technology during instructions impacts
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mood in the course of the learning process. With the
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of
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children can
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explore and learn about places they would never
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to. To give an example, in a geography class, students can explore different cities of the world, the tallest mountains and the most dangerous jungles. To conclude, in the recent century, due to the rapid changes in technology, schools are inevitable to alteration their approach
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using
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multimedia
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appropriate to suggest governments
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provide circumstances for the development of schools.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multimedia resources
  • captivating
  • complex subjects
  • visual and auditory stimuli
  • digitalized future
  • technological skills
  • cultivate
  • imagination
  • concentration
  • depth and detail
  • critical thinking
  • analytical skills
  • disparities in education
  • tangible experience
  • continuous learning
  • personal development
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