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In many countries. paying for things using mobile phone (cellphone) app is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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Use
 mobile
apps
 in the majority of the countries for purchasing products is skyrocketing recently.
Although
 it has some demerits, the merits are much more. I will discuss both aspects throughout
this
 essay. Many
people
 used to do online shopping through mobile
apps
 while others even do not know how to
use
 novel technologies. As a vivid example, uneducated as well as old
people
 did not learn how to
use
 mobile
apps
. still worse they do not know how to
use
 smartphones.
On the other hand
, the security of trading through the web either with mobile
apps
 or websites has its own drawbacks. Not only the other sides are unknown but
also
 hackers could intrusion the computer and mobile systems. So trusting the other side is really hard for inexpert
people
 as well as protecting against hackers. one of the major radix benefits of e-commerce
such
 as android and I-phone applications is saving time and more security while purchasing products and paying the cost by the phone. Using mobile
apps
, reduced going to a bank. Most of the financial tasks could be done on the smartphone so it saves the time for whom used these
apps
. It is much more secure in comparison with moving cash. It could not be lost or even be stolen while the opposite side could happen. To conclude, while there are some drawbacks
such
 as using new technologies with unfamiliar
people
, they are not insurmountable and teaching them would be a remedial issue.
On the contrary
 side, the benefits like saving time and increasing security while using financial
apps
instead
 of traditional banking systems are prominent.
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