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Human activity has had a negative effect on plants and animal all over the world. Some people think that it too late to do something about it. other think that there is still time to take effective action. discuss both sides and give your opinion. give reasons for your answer and include any relevent examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is a contentious debate among the people arguing
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 human activity
that is
 harming the diversity of various
plants
 and
animals
 all over the world. Some think that it is now too late to do something while other think that there is still time to implement an
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effective
effictive
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effective
 action.
This
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support
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support
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Furthermore
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Furthermore
, I opine that it is too late to take
an
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any
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 action
towards
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toward
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 the conservation of certain
species
.
To begin
 with, the mass excavations performed by mining companies to extract
the
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fossil fuels are one
the
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 major reasons for
extinction
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the extinction
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 of various
species
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of
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if
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of
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animal
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animals
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 and
plants
.
Hence
, the
animals
 are responsible
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 maintaining the wildlife ecosystem and
plants
 were the basic needs to sustain life at all the levels which
also
 acted as the
medicene
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medicine
 to nearby living tribal peoples.
For instance
,
the
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uncontrolled coal mining in
the
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West Bengal
has
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lead
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the
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 damage
of
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to
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 Elephant Corridors.
Initially
, The Corridor was the
most dense
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densest
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 forest which was the source of and was
most
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the most
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 preferred place for Elephants to breed. The decline in more than half of its population was recorded in
previous
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the previous
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 year which was surveyed by the Government of India.
This
 up-rooted place will never be used to serve the population of the elephants in future.
On the other hand
, there is
a
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hope for
reproducing
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reproduction
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of
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ancient
plants
 and
animals
 again by performing scientific research
in
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genes
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the genes
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 of various
species
. One of the
technology
 referred
as
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to as
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 Hydroponics
which
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is used to grow
the
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various kinds of vegetables. As an experiment,
this
technology
 is quite successful to fulfil the requirements of people living in urban areas which excludes the intervention
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human
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the human
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in
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apply
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wildlife
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a wildlife
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 environment.
For example
,
europe
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 is known for
artificial
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the artificial
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forest
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forests
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 as there was mass deforestation in
previous
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the previous
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 decade. Now with the advent of new
technology
, the German began to grow the vegetables for themselves as
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government
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the govenment
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govenment
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government
 has imposed strict rules
to
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 forest resources. In conclusion, I opine that it is impossible to regenerate the historical
animals
 and plant
species
 because
technology
 is not that advanced to replicate the plant
species
 on the basis of genes even in
the
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 suitable environment.
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