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Writing Samples
Band 3

People spend too much time on the internet. Do you agree or disagree?

Given how our world is evolving, It is often argued that the
internet
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 network is the thing
which
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 people consume their time
in
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. I strongly agree with
this
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 idea, because in the present
life
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 most services and facilities
become
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depending
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 on
the
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apply
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technological methods,
such
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 as the
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internet
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. On the one hand, Nowadays, the rate of development is increasing dramatically ,especially for services, and the
internet
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 network is playing a vital role in
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.
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, there are loads of things
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 not be available without it.
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, in developing countries, flight tickets are available only on company websites.
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, Social media platforms are becoming the most preferable place to sell and buy items.
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, people recently tend to use it more and more.
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, many students all over the world prefer studying online using educational applications like Coursera rather than studying on campus. To illustrate , after
Covid-19
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 spread, most of the students
have
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expressed their happiness
for
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in
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studying their subjects online,
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, Universities all over the world have increased the number of online programs.
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, The consumed time on the
Internet
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 has been observed clearly in all life aspects
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 as education, travel, and work.
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 I fully agree, there are many standards and criteria that should be taken into consideration for the aim of
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 excessive use.
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, I would recommend that the governments should impose high supervision on
internet
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 users of specific ages to make it more beneficial and useful.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • excessive
  • negatively affects
  • physical and mental health
  • decreased productivity
  • hinders personal growth
  • internet addiction
  • essential
  • numerous benefits
  • productive
  • educational
  • wisely
  • individual choice
  • responsibility
  • manage
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