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‘Social networking sites such as Facebook and Twitter are observed to have more negative effects than positive being more useful for the criminals than others. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#sites #facebook #twitter #effects #criminals
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It is undeniable that Social Media
sites
 have a significant number of users around the world. While
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 some people argue that criminals and
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 making the negative impacts outweigh the positive ones, I do believe that the
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benefits
benifits
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benefits
 are more than
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. On the one hand, the
open world
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 on these platforms makes some people feel that they are completely free to break the law as they like,
furthermore
, the technological progression we live nowadays
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encourages
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encourages
 them to think that way and to use the online
sites
 as a place where they can face no limitation, no monitors, no authorities.
Moreover
, the revolutions that happened in many
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countries
countires
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countries
 across the
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 made these
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mitigate
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attractive to the public.
On the other hand
, there are many ways we can see how these platforms produce a wide range of benefits the vast majority use these
sites
 to make a contact with others their families, friends and colleagues, others for education either students or teachers, giants companies sell their products online through these.
However
, the atrocity is still there
such
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websites
websits
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websites
, the governments are facing these
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firmly
family
 and blocking these activities to deter
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 from using these to promote their activities In conclusion, I do think that Social networking
sites
 have presented great services for the human, so
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 benefits are far more
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