Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Nowadays, public
health
is a concern in many countries all over the world. Some believe that the best way to improve public health
is by increasing the number of sport
Change the noun form
sports
facilities
. I largely agree to
the statement, Change preposition
with
although
, there are other better measures to cope public
Change preposition
with public
health
issues. Increasing the quantity of sport
Change the noun form
sports
facilities
in the country may help to improve the health
of the citizens. Presence
of gym Correct article usage
The presence
facilities
around the residential areas for example
may encourage the residents to perform exercises which may lead them to a
better cardiovascular Remove the article
apply
health
. Theoretically, people may start using gym and sport
equipment in order to get themselves active and healthy. In reality, without proper training and education, a person’s motivation may drop and the frequency of attending gym will reduce. Change the noun form
sports
Hence
, it is clear that
adding up the number of sport
Change the noun form
sports
facilities
may only temporarily encourage the population to participate in sports activity but not a long term
fixation. It is definitely a mistake to assume that having more Add a hyphen
long-term
sport
amenities is the best way to improve the public Change the noun form
sports
health
of a country because there are other measures that can be taken into consideration. Adding corrective taxes
to sugary drinks
may reduce the consumption of sweet drinks
in the community. Sugary drinks
can be addictive and causes an increase in blood glucose level which may lead to diabetes and cardiovascular diseases. For instance
, by adding taxes
to Pepsi and Coca Cola
,Add a hyphen
Coca-Cola
consumer
tend to find other healthier alternatives Fix the agreement mistake
consumers
such
as drinking mineral water because these sugary drinks
are expensive. Without adding taxes
to this
type of junk food, there is high
tendency for people to consume excessive sugar and end up being diagnosed with fatal diseases. In conclusion, increasing Add an article
a high
number
of Correct article usage
the number
sport
Change the noun form
sports
facilities
can be helpful in coping health
issues, Change preposition
with health
however
it is an overstatement to say that Add a comma
however,
itis
the best way to improve public Correct your spelling
it is
health
. Many other measures such
as adding corrective taxes
to junk food could also
solve the same problem.Submitted by vinahravin on
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