Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, public

health

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is a concern in many countries all over the world. Some believe that the best way to improve public

health

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is by increasing the number of

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sport

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facilities

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. I largely agree

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the statement,

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, there are other better measures to cope

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health

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issues. Increasing the quantity of

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sport

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facilities

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in the country may help to improve the

health

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of the citizens.

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of gym

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around the residential areas

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may encourage the residents to perform exercises which may lead them to

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better cardiovascular

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. Theoretically, people may start using gym and

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sport

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equipment in order to get themselves active and healthy. In reality, without proper training and education, a person’s motivation may drop and the frequency of attending gym will reduce.

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it is clear that

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adding up the number of

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sport

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facilities

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may only temporarily encourage the population to participate in sports activity but not a

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fixation. It is definitely a mistake to assume that having more

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sport

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amenities is the best way to improve the public

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of a country because there are other measures that can be taken into consideration. Adding corrective

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to sugary

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may reduce the consumption of sweet

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in the community. Sugary

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can be addictive and causes an increase in blood glucose level which may lead to diabetes and cardiovascular diseases.

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, by adding

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to Pepsi and

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,

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tend to find other healthier alternatives

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as drinking mineral water because these sugary

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are expensive. Without adding

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to

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type of junk food, there is

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tendency for people to consume excessive sugar and end up being diagnosed with fatal diseases. In conclusion, increasing

number

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the number

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of

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sport

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sports

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facilities

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can be helpful in coping

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health

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with health

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issues,

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however

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it is an overstatement to say that

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the best way to improve public

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. Many other measures

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as adding corrective

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to junk food could

also

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solve the same problem.