Because individuals and countries cannot help everyone in the world who needs help, they should only be concerned about their own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Generally, there are certain population in every part of the
world
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that needs help. Some believe that individuals and
countries
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cannot help every unfortunate human on earth and they should only care about their own community and country. In
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essay, I largely agree that it is impossible to help every individual in
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world
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;
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, there are possible ways to support those who are in need from all corners of the
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. The main risk factor to
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to help every community on earth is that some hapless victims are unreachable especially those who are living in
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at war. There are many families who lost their homes and are in scarcity
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after their territories are
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attacked by dangerous nuclear weapons.
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, the people of Iraq, Ukraine and Yemen are being murdered and there has been bombing taking place every moment in unexpected ways.
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, it is indeed unsafe for any social workers or volunteers to visit and help
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that are under nuclear attack.
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, it does not mean that these
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should be neglected. There are methods to ensure that those who are in need receive support and care from the people of other nations. In the past couple of decades, the internet had many reformations that have made online transactions and donating funds convenient and quicker. The banks and volunteering organisations may collaborate to collect money from their investors or customers in order to help those unfortunates who need monetary funds for food, medical, shelter and education.
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UNICEF which is a non-profit organisation,
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, is helping out many children from
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world
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countries
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by providing free online education
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video calls and chats.
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, with the help of the
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, many volunteers are able to contribute their money and services to families and children from
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all over the
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. In conclusion, it is indeed tough to reach other
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in order to support people who need help
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safety
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.
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, it is an overstatement to say that individuals should only be taking care of their own communities and
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because there are effective ways to help societies from different nations who are unfortunate.
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