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nowadays online shopping is becoming more popular than in the store shopping. Do you agree or disagree

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over the
last
one
 or two decades, digital shopping is becoming more famous rather than
traditional
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one
. In my point of view, e-commerce is the best way to buy anything
such
 as fabric,
instace
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instance
 food, and electronics to save
the
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time.
However
, I completely agree that
this
 is the suggested method to purchase everything. To commence with, due to globalization, everything is coming
to
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 our hands without going out to buy
through
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online.
Moreover
,
the
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digital
digitial
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digital
 shopping saves our time, because they deliver to home and we do not need to go out.
One
 clear example is that, if we want to purchase food, groceries, clothes, and households so we have to go
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to 6 shops to buy,
then
 8 to 10 hours would be wasted
instead
 of that we can get them in multiple e-cart sites
such
 as meesho, Flipcart, and Amazon. In
this
 busy world, everybody is with their
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 so that they are not able to do shopping outside so
this
 would be the recommended
one
moreover
 we can use that period to spend with family.
On the other hand
, e-carts have some disadvantages
that
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color
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 may vary from
website
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. Even though
,
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 it has
myriad
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 of options but whatever we
chosen
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 from digital
those
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did not come as it is.
For instance
, if we buy a toy or dress for our family at that term we would feel
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if
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 it would not come properly.
Therefore
, before buying we have to
reasearch
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research
search
 for it and read guidelines, policies and reviews
then
 it would be beneficial. To sum up, having
a
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numerous benefits
for
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 online shopping is the best to acquire anything.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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