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Technology have developed very fast in the past 100 years. However, some people think that technology progress has brought negative effect on humanity. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

In
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 modern era, technology has become one of the essential aspects of our lives. It has made our lives convenient and
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 up to a certain extent. Developments in the technical field have picked up pace since the
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 century. There are some people who believe that
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 progress can have an adverse effect on humankind.
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, I completely disagree with
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 thought process and will support my view with examples.
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, due
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 advancements in the technology sector of the banking domain, anyone ranging from a labourer to a billionaire can complete the monetary transactions from the comfort of
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 home.
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 the introduction of a mechanism called
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the Unified Payments Interface. The transaction can be completed in a few seconds without the need to travel to a bank.
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, we can buy
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groceries at a local shop and
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 transfer the amount directly through the UPI. For
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, we only need to scan the shop's QR code.
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, most of the things nowadays are dependent on the internet. The internet is one
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 part of the technology which has become a necessity. There are numerous uses
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, some have completely abolished the old traditional ways.
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, earlier, people used to send letters from one point of the world to another to communicate.
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, with the help of
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, we can replicate the exact same thing within a fraction of
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 through technological functionalities like e-mail and messaging tools
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 as
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. In conclusion,
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 there are a few individuals who think that technological development is detrimental to mankind. I believe, it has many advantages and has become an essential part of our daily lives.

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Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and relates to your overall argument.
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Include a counterargument to show you understand both sides of the issue.
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Your introduction clearly states your view on the topic.
relevant specific examples
You provide good examples from daily life that many people can relate to.
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