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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping on line.

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, due to the burgeoning of technology majority of individuals are using
internet
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 as a way to buy things that they need. In
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 the merits and
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 to the
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 and
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the producer. To commence with,
internet
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 becomes
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 for most
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the
people
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 because it can access anywhere and give
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convenience
confidence
convience
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convenience
 to the users.
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 why shopping online is one of the trends around the world.
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 of
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, most
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the
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 are afraid to go outside due to the virus.
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, they will just do errands like buying foods
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online just to be safe.
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,
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 can save
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 and energy because they do not need to go outside their
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. While
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the companies they can advertise their promotion by posting it online and more
people
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 can be a possible buyer.
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, one of the drawbacks of purchasing online is that
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individuals cannot check the quality of the items.
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, for the foods not all the information
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.
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, the quality of the product cannot be
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 unless it is delivered.
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, sometimes there are missing items
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which the
consumers
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 need to inform the store and it will
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time
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 to deliver
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 again. To sum up, online shopping is easy to use and convenient
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 numerous
people
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 because it saves
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 and energy.
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, it
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 a negative impact
also
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consumers
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 just the quality cannot check and there are times that it will have
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 once it was delivered.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • virtual marketplace
  • consumer satisfaction
  • product comparison
  • overhead costs
  • cybersecurity threats
  • operational costs
  • global market
  • carbon footprint
  • economic impact
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