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What are the advantages and disadvantages of using CCTV cameras to fight crime?

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Nowadays, people are using CCTV cameras in important places to reduce crime. For many people, the installation of
CCTVs
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 is the most useful way to tackle intruders.
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, there are both pros and cons to deciding to do
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. In
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 television cameras has been increasingly popular to deal with criminals and some of the challenges to overcome. Let's begin by looking at the advantages of the usage of
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 against thieves, goons, and so on. One of the main positives of it is that it can improve the surveillance system. What I mean by
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 is that by using
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 one can easily keep an eye on the installed places for almost
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 can greatly benefit the security system.
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,
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CCTV
 surveillance can be cost-effective.
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, it can significantly cut the usage of other monitoring options,
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 as human guards, alarms, etc.
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, it can considerably decrease the surveillance budget. Turning to the other side of the argument,
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 fail to monitor at night. To be more precise, it seems impossible when the place lacks both natural and artificial light.
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 often hampers protection issues. Another issue is that the
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 circuit cameras can be subjected to easy manipulation.
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, sometimes it is linked with other devices, say, mobile phones, tablets, and so on. The person who has access to these devices can easily gain control over it. All things considered,
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 contribute a lot to protecting criminals. You need to weigh up the pros of
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 monitoring and cost-cutting edges; and the cons of the unavailability of night vision and easy manipulation. I believe the benefit in terms of protection eventually outweighs any negatives.
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The essay addresses the advantages and disadvantages of using CCTV cameras to fight crime and provides relevant examples to support its points. However, the essay could benefit from a clearer and more in-depth analysis of the disadvantages.
coherence and cohesion
The essay demonstrates a clear logical structure with a well-organized introduction and conclusion. The main points are supported with relevant examples. However, the coherence and cohesion could be further improved with stronger transitions between paragraphs and a more cohesive development of ideas.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Deterrent
  • CCTV (Closed-Circuit Television)
  • Evidence
  • Constant surveillance
  • Monitor
  • Privacy
  • Vandalism
  • Malfunction
  • Blackmail
  • Voyeurism
  • Surveillance
  • Maintenance
  • Conviction
  • Authorities
  • Public safety
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