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‘Social networking sites such as Facebook and Twitter are observed to have more negative effects than positive being more useful for the criminals than others. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Due to the development of technology, the
internet
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 has become more closely linked to our daily life, and some apps,
such
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 s Facebook and Twitter, have been used overly frequently.
However
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, some
people
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 argue that the negative effect of the
internet
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 outweighs its positive effect. I don't agree with
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 statement, and my reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.
First
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, social network
sites
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 can widen our horizons and open our eyes.
For
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example
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, Twitter is a great platform to access all sorts of latest news and information, which are essential for our studies and life.
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, except for schools, those
sites
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 are great platforms to learn new knowledge. According to my own experience, I have gained some scientific knowledge from Twitter.
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,
users
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 can communicate with others through social network
sites
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. It's commonplace that there are a group of
people
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 who are less confident and too sky to talk in real-life.
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, with the advent of the
internet
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, they can surmount
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 psychological obstacle by communicating with others on the
internet
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. Take Tinder as an
example
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. It is a well-known dating app; it addresses the issue of being unable to find a partner to a large extent.
People
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 tend to be a bit shy in real-life;
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, there are fewer opportunities to find a suitable partner for some
people
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.
Nevertheless
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,
this
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 app can help
users
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 to find their ideal boy/girlfriend.
On the other hand
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, the
internet
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 has some drawbacks.
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, it helps to increase the crime rate.
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example
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, the
internet
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 scam is famous nowadays. Deceivers use those
sites
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 to make up some deceptions,
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 as lottery to lure
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' money. They pretend they are some sort of investors to convince you to invest some money on their fake websites. Once you really invest money, all your information will be stolen.
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, it's easy to visit some illegal websites now because of the
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. Take my own experience as an
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. I have once accidentally visited a drug website;
users
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 could buy any kind of drug they wanted. I think
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 a phenomenon can damage the harmony of society adversely. In conclusion, the
internet
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 has its advantages and disadvantages; how to define it depends on the individuals entirely.
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