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The environmental problems that today's world is facing are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. So government and large organizations should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. What extent so you agree or disagree?

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In the contemporary world impact of climate change can be seen in large areas. To reduce the environmental effect, legislative bodies need to take some efforts on a big scale believed by some groups of
people
. I totally agree with the upgiven notion and I feel the result of
this
 can be seen worldwide.
To begin
 with, the official authorities have more power to take the steps at the big level, as
this
 is the main motive of making governments for the country. The government can update the policies from time to time by considering the damage that has been done by the dwellers, to make
this
 work they have the right to pose a fine or punishment for breaking down these rules. Because
people
 will listen and follows governments' words more as compared to the common
people
 who are concerned about the environmental damage. In
this
 way,
people
 will be more aware of their surroundings.
Moreover
, the administration can divide their pressure by educating
people
 about their job and duties on the primary level. They can organise the seminars or school programmes to spread the knowledge about the number of effects that had already been posed on the earth and educate all the generations with some steps to save the earth and make them understand that their job duties to keep the surroundings neat and clean which will help in the reduction of pollution. To exemplify, in the developed countries special programmes about the environment are compulsory for teenagers so that they developed their interest in the environment at an early age which will have a long-lasting effect. In the nutshell, common
people
 can
also
 do some steps at their level but the regime's efforts will have broad results. Seminars and policies need to be updated timely.
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