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Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. Do agree or disagree?

#meat #diet
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Food plays an essential role in a life of an individual. Some consider that everyone should eliminate
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 from their nutriment and take up a vegetarian lifestyle. Few publics believe veggie foodstuff
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it can cause harm to the body;
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, I cannot entirely agree with the given statement that everyone should adopt a
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-free
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 to be healthy. In
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, a Vegetarian
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 is not a balanced
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, and no study guarantees absolute health by eating vegetarian alone.
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, in some professions like wrestling and boxing where daily calories needed are much higher than
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 people,
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 amount of energy can only be taken from a
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 based on
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.
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, relying totally upon vegetation for food is not possible for all.
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, a fish contains ten times more amino acids as compared to 50 grams of almonds.
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, A healthy vegetarian
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 is low in fat and high in fibre. Studies have linked the consumption of
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, specifically red foodstuff, with an increased risk of heart disease, stroke and certain types of cancer.
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, the consumption of
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 has contributed to the global increase in obesity.
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, many countries in the West that show high
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 consumption
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 offer higher health issues, which are usually related to the heart and ranking among the highest obesity rates.
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, I reiterate that even though a vegetarian
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 has several benefits, I still believe that vegetarian people may have to take many supplements and put in much effort to have a balanced meal full of essential macro and micronutrients.
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, non-vegetarian people can easily mix vegetarian and non-vegetarian diets with remaining healthy.
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