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In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#countries #people #salaries #country #governments #level
While
 sometimes people argue that high salaries is helpful for a country, others say it can adversely affect on some aspects of country, and government should put a
limit
 on their level.
while
 there are some benefits to the first view, I believe that the second view is more beneficial. There is an opinion asserting that the number of individuals who are migrating to metropolises to achieve better conditions in their lives is increasing, but living in urban area might be reach different to rural area. Benefit: benefit of
sth
 for
sth
 Bring, gain, obtain, provide, have, enjoy Major, considerable, substantial, long-term -Financial, environmental, social, health, economic, tax
Value
:
value
 of
sth
, be of great/little
value
, place put a high
value
 on
sth
 -Increase/rise/go up in
value
 -Fall/go down in
value
 -Double in
value
; the house doubled in
value
 over two years. -Low
value
, high
value
, the real
value
, property/land values, the monetary/cash
value
 -lasting
value
 (=that will be important or useful for a long time) -sentimental
value
 (=important because it was a gift, reminds you of someone etc) -nutritional
value
 (=the amount of things that a food contains, which are good for your health) the difference between X and Y is huge. Motivate =/= demotivate Executive: (adj) ejrayi, (n) mojri Executive salaries Feasible: shodani, amali, emkan pazir A Consequence (of)
sth
: natije asar aghebat Poverty: faghr (n)
Limit
: set a
limit
 (
also
 impose a
limit
 formal), put a
limit
 on something, exceed a
limit
/go over a
limit
 (=go beyond a
limit
) an upper/lower
limit
, a strict
limit
, a legal
limit
, the speed
limit
, a time
limit
, an age
limit
, a weight/height
limit
, spending
limit
 we no longer remember
sth
 treat sb as opportunities to have fun
sth
 seems to be the priority olaviat concerned with dar rabete ba give and receive present enjoy meal practice religion? look forward moshtagh budan associate vabaste
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • incentivize
  • discrepancy
  • inequality
  • social cohesion
  • equitable distribution
  • wealth concentration
  • talent retention
  • global competitiveness
  • social unrest
  • innovate
  • government intervention
  • salary cap
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