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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Only people who earn a lot of money are successful. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

#people #money #support
MONEY
 IS OFTEN CONSIDERED AS THE ULTIMATE MARKER OF
SUCCESS
. I DO NOT AGREE WITH
THIS
 STATEMENT BECAUSE I THINK EVEN THOUGH
MONEY
 IS
ONE
 OF THE DETERMINANTS OF
SUCCESS
, IT IS NOT WHAT DETERMINES WHETHER A
PERSON
 IS SUCCESSFUL OR NOT. A
PERSON
 IS CONSIDERED SUCCESSFUL IF HE CAN SUSTAIN HIMSELF FINANCIALLY, HAS GREAT REPUTE IN THE SOCIETY, HAS A GOOD EMOTIONAL QUOTIENT AND HAS GOOD HEALTH.
ONE
'S FINANCIALLY STATUS INCREASES WHEN A
PERSON
 CLIMBS UP THE SOCIAL LADDER AND THE VICE VERSA. WITH
MONEY
ONE
 CAN OWN WHATEVER THEY WISH. IT IS OF NO DOUBT TO ANY OF US THAT MATERIALISTIC ASSETS WILL INCREASE A
MAN
'S NET WORTH. OUR PRESENT SOCIETY PLACES GREAT IMPORTANCE ON CAPITAL AND, NATURALLY, A CHAP WITH GREAT FORTUNE EFFORTLESSLY COMMANDS RESPECT AND ADORATION FROM THE SOCIAL CIRCLE TO WHICH HE BELONGS TO. BUT IF YOU ASK, DOES
THIS
 DEFINE
SUCCESS
? I DO NOT THINK SO. A
MAN
 CAN OWN ALL THE RICHES IN THE WORLD AND CAN STILL FEEL UNFULFILLED AND DISSATISFIED.
SUCCESS
 COMES WHEN A
PERSON
 CAN BELIEVE WITH CONVICTION THAT HE HAS ACHIEVED WHAT HE WAS MEANT TO ACHIEVE. TO BE SUCCESSFUL
ONE
 HAS TO FEEL CONTENT. WHEN YOU ARE A
PERSON
 OF GREAT QUALITY AND PERSONALITY, THE
PERSON
 AND NOT THEIR WEALTH EARNS THE RESPECT AND ADMIRATION OF THE SOCIETY. THE BEST EXAMPLE TO PROVE MY POINT WOULD BE TO MENTION PERSONALITIES, THE LIKES OF GANDHI, BUDDHA, AND MOTHER TERESA WHO OWNED HARDLY ANYTHING IN TERMS OF WORLDLY POSSESSIONS LET ALONE
MONEY
 BUT ARE REMEMBERED WITH GREAT REVERENCE EVEN TODAY. THEY WERE SUCCESSFUL IN ACHIEVING THE MISSION THEY SET THEIR HEART ON TO AND THEY ACHIEVED IT NOT BY THE
MONEY
 THEY OWNED BUT BY THE HEARTS THEY WERE ABLE TO MOVE. IN CONCLUSION, I WOULD MENTION THAT
MONEY
 CAN MAKE A
MAN
 SUCCESSFUL BUT
MONEY
 IS NOT ALWAYS NECESSARY TO MAKE A
MAN
 SUCCESSFUL, BECAUSE
SUCCESS
 IS NOT DEFINED SOLELY BY WHAT YOU POSSESS BUT
ALSO
 BY WHAT YOU ACHIEVE.
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