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People nowadays tend to have children in older ages. do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, in the contemporary epoch, juveniles prefer to postpone being parents to later years
in contrast
 to medieval times.
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this
 would open up new gates for
young
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 generation to have kids once they are prepared for different aspects of maternity and paternity. Whilst elucidating how
this
 can raise countries’ elder population to a hazardous stage for
community
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.
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 with, for the
first
 notion,
new
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 generation remarkably feels slighter pressure to have kids in
early
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 years in comparison to their ancestors while they have a significant immutable situation.
Consequently
, due to improvement in
fertility’s
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fertility
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 studies, one is free to devote more years
on
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 numerous sides of their life
such
 as profession, education,
self growth
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, etc. whilst there is no need to
concern
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 about losing the chance of being
parent
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a parent
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 in forthcoming stages of their life. A survey carried
by
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 oxford university in 2020 revealed more than 43
percent
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 of young females who are occupied in companies are showing interest to focus on their career path in their youth and get pregnant while they have a more stable job
statue
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status
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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